Amendment: In section 4(a) replace the words "expertise in medical conflict" with "expertise in painful medical conditions." or something similar so that it's as specific as possible and not open to interpretation.
Rep. Taylor Wright's Bill:
Question: Your whole act is on creating a universal background check. What would be some things that would be assessed in this background check to ensure that a buyer is able to purchase a gun?
Amendment: Define the word firearm by adding it to your definitions. Add something like " Firearm: a rifle, gun, or pistol that can do a substantial amount of damage to people and property." This way, the word is unambiguous and definite to what your bill is adressing.
Amendment: Define the word firearm by adding it to your definitions. Add something like " Firearm: a rifle, gun, or pistol that can do a substantial amount of damage to people and property." This way, the word is unambiguous and definite to what your bill is adressing.
Rep. Randy Whiting's Bill:
Amendment: The millions of Americans who don't like the amount of money already being spent on space exploration usually oppose it because they are unaware of what the benefits are, so it would be helpful if you stated some specifics in your findings such as "Space exploration has contributed to revolutionary advances such as global positioning, weather prediction, data storage improvements, and improvements in optics."
Rep. Lashay Davenport's Bill:
Question: In sections 4(b) and 4(d) of your bill you state that no homeless person will be turned away from a shelter and that the states will implement ways to help the homeless find jobs. How would you verify that somebody is indeed homeless and not trying to abuse the system? What if a homeless person is not mentally stable and can cause harm to other homeless people?
Amendment: I suggest you add to section 3 what a homeless person is as this word can be opened up to many possible definitions. Adding this: "An individual who resided in a shelter or place not meant for human habitation and who is exiting an institution where he or she temporarily resided" in the definitions sections will make homelessness clear.
Amendment: I suggest you add to section 3 what a homeless person is as this word can be opened up to many possible definitions. Adding this: "An individual who resided in a shelter or place not meant for human habitation and who is exiting an institution where he or she temporarily resided" in the definitions sections will make homelessness clear.
Rep. Scott Christman's Bill:
Question: By not allowing abortions by doctors, don't you think that could be potentially dangerous to women who want an abortion and don't wan't to carry a baby to term? They would seek to have "black market abortions" that are significantly less safe, and many times result in death.
Amendment: Replace "ban all physicians to abort a woman's baby unless due to the safety of the mother." with "ban all physicians from performing abortions on women unless the safety of the mother is at risk." By doing this, the message being conveyed is more clear, the previous wording was a little confusing to understand.
Amendment: Replace "ban all physicians to abort a woman's baby unless due to the safety of the mother." with "ban all physicians from performing abortions on women unless the safety of the mother is at risk." By doing this, the message being conveyed is more clear, the previous wording was a little confusing to understand.
Rep. Natalia Olszewska's Bill:
Question: In your bill you say: "The U.S. Department of Education shall distribute the grants equally amongst all fifty (50) states" What do you mean by equally? Some states have less money than others and would require more grants to fund such a program, would you give more money to these states?
Rep. Madeline Bryant's Bill:
Amendment: In section 2.a.3 of your bill you state that the White House Initiative on Educational Excellence for African Americans was created but it "created little to no buzz," that phrase should be replaced with "garnered little attention" because the original wording is inappropriate for use in a government document.
Rep. Veronica Lam's Bill:
Question: The title of the bill is the "Better Use of Nitrogen Sources Act" but nowhere in the bill does it state where nitrogen comes into play. Where is the nitrogen? It may be confusing to those who are not familiar with fertilizers, so it would be best if an explanation or example were in the bill.
Rep. Rico Vigliotti's Bill:
Question: In section 5.a of your bill you state that it will be legal to grow marijuana, will there be a limit to how much people can grow? Will people be only allowed to grow it in their backyards?
Rep. Mo Brown's Bill:
Amendment: In section 2, under purposes it states that a purpose of this bill will be to "lessen the ruckus within jails" what is ruckus? Do you mean sounds or fighting? A definitions section should be added to the bill adding this word. The definition should read "Ruckus: a commotion or cause of grief and anxiety" By having this definition, it won't confuse readers with the definition meaning loud sounds.
Question: In your bill you say: "The U.S. Department of Education shall distribute the grants equally amongst all fifty (50) states" What do you mean by equally? Some states have less money than others and would require more grants to fund such a program, would you give more money to these states?
Rep. Madeline Bryant's Bill:
Amendment: In section 2.a.3 of your bill you state that the White House Initiative on Educational Excellence for African Americans was created but it "created little to no buzz," that phrase should be replaced with "garnered little attention" because the original wording is inappropriate for use in a government document.
Rep. Veronica Lam's Bill:
Question: The title of the bill is the "Better Use of Nitrogen Sources Act" but nowhere in the bill does it state where nitrogen comes into play. Where is the nitrogen? It may be confusing to those who are not familiar with fertilizers, so it would be best if an explanation or example were in the bill.
Rep. Rico Vigliotti's Bill:
Question: In section 5.a of your bill you state that it will be legal to grow marijuana, will there be a limit to how much people can grow? Will people be only allowed to grow it in their backyards?
Rep. Mo Brown's Bill:
Amendment: In section 2, under purposes it states that a purpose of this bill will be to "lessen the ruckus within jails" what is ruckus? Do you mean sounds or fighting? A definitions section should be added to the bill adding this word. The definition should read "Ruckus: a commotion or cause of grief and anxiety" By having this definition, it won't confuse readers with the definition meaning loud sounds.
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